This was fairly well addressed in your thread in November:
Please see attached sketch it shows service conductor call it A tapped from the line side of the main switchboard six main service disconnects. The service conductor A then goes into trough where it is connected to conductor B which feed jockey pump controller service rated and the service...
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My comment today is the same as it was then:
The only problem I would have with it as drawn is, to me, a grey area and that is what I mentioned in Post #19:
695.4(A) Direct Connection. The supply conductors shall directly connect the power source to a listed fire pump controller, a listed combination fire pump controller and power transfer switch, or a listed fire pump power transfer switch.
Depending on how you made your tap to the jockey pump in the wireway would you possibly violate the "direct connection" ? By using a split bolt I;d see no problem, a polaris connector where you actually cut the conductor would be questionable to me but that's a field decision not one with which plans review should be concerned.
and I think Tom baker's post is the most relevant:
Perhaps you should get a PE who deals with fire pump systems to review the submittal. If a mistake is made on plan review there would be a significant liability.